It Was a Transparent World - Comments

#1: your layout is fantastic! Love it. #2: that first chapter is brilliant. It makes me want to read more to find out who Myra is and why she's acting so crazy. #3: I adore the 'lack of time' in chapter 2. I hate that Myra is talking about her last breath though, it's really sad, but I love that no one seems to have time because that's like universal. #4: One of who? Who is she one of? Okay, Hate that she died but I love the ending of the chapter! It's beautifully written. #5: Okay Myra is kind of creepy, but there's something about her I like. I really like how she doesn't take long to move on with her 'after life' life. #6: Chapter five is so sad! But the madness does explain her creepiness. I like how you develop Myra's character more here. #7: I love Myra's emotion process. Her thoughts are amazing in chapter six. #8: I love the line 'A human with a divine curse.' #9: I love the idea of someone helping her. Another ghost. I adore that she wants a companion so badly even in death, and now she's possibly found one? And I love Night for the name 10: Okay, I love Night Scorpion. The name the person. I adore him. I adore how he's touchy-feely and how Myra is like BACK THE HELL UP. I just love it. Seriously chapter 9 is my favorite so far. 11: Her brother really blamed seeing ghosts on a hangover? Really? haha! (sorry commenting and reading at the same time) I adore her brother's reaction to the woman sitting in his office and the woman coming into his office. That's a good chapter, but I still like chapter 9 best. Can't wait to see what's next! <3

@ Shayney92
Haha, so honest! And there is a story as to why she could curse the brother. It'll disclose in the upcoming chapters...I hope! And thanks a lot bro!

@ Proud Saiyan Warrior
Yay! Thank you so much! I'll get back to you soon. I'm honestly glad you liked the layout, and the story. Your comment kinda inspired chapter 11, so thanks for that and everything else!

omg so many chapters now. I love how you made it that people can get cursed to seeing ghosts! so good! her poor brother though. What a meanie!!

I actually kinda like this layout, it fit's with the time theme that you've got going on.

I also really like the flow you have going, like your writing style. It's very blunt and to the point, yet it's artistic and pulls you in.

As for the story itself, I like what you have so far, especially the whole 'wandering soul' aspect. I also like that she stuck around, when the story really doesnt give her a reason to stick around, it's like she's got un finsihed business, only she doesnt. It's like she's almost pleading for them to notice and care.

I cant wait to read more!

@ Eridan's Royal Blood
Um...I'm honestly so horrible with layouts...could you help suggest something that would...well, not turn people off? Haha

And thanks for the sub and I'm so glad you liked chap10! And when you have spare time, do tell me about your thoughts on the title. I'd love to know them! And I'm honestly a free soul...haha.

Thanks again!

I did subscribe to this story, so I read the latest chapter earlier today. I will give feedback on it, though. Along with the rest of the story/layout, title, etc.

Chapter ten gave me so many chills, holy crap. But you did such a wonderful job with it, that I couldn't help but be really impressed. I so want to know what's going to happen with Myra's brother, the suspense is honestly killing me.

Now, onto the layout. At first, I was kind of turned off by it because of the background. Once I really got into the story though, I didn't worry about it as much.

The title is wonderful. To me, it's talking about Myra seeing the ghosts and, well, the explanation on that one would be long and I'll spare you all that, haha.

I'm just really loving this story right now and I can't wait to see all that's going to happen in this.

@ Eridan's Royal Blood
Thank you so much! This really means a lot! I hope you will keep following the story. (:

I've seen this story a lot on the Stories page, but never thought to read it. I'm glad you commented on my blog, because this story is beautiful! It's nothing like I've ever read before but that's a good thing!

Honestly, I feel really sorry for Myra. And her brother. I'm really looking forward to seeing what happens with the both of them. The way you write is wonderful, with hardly any mistakes (if there are any, it didn't distract me from the story at all).

@ Shayney92
Well, read further and decide for yourself. And let me know, since I might need help in future hehe And I updated!

It was that creepy smile... and wow. Her poor brother...

@ Shayney92
Crybaby Bear! hahaha Eh? What makes you think so?

@ Tipsy Returns
Shhhhh! I cry a lot hahaha! So much activity! I'm beginning to think she is a little insane....

@ Shayney92
It did? Wow! You're such a baby, bear! Haha And nope, not the end. Am uploading next chap

I'm not going to lie. Chapter 3 made me cry! But like is this the end? or is there more?

@ Shayney92
Thank you! Me sooo happy!

noo.....stop.... :O But really don't stop. haha.

OMG....