Too Blind to See It! - Comments

This was so good!! I love that you made Jenna a virgin and I don't think any other NHL player would have played this role better then Zach Parise (maybe Evgeni Malkin... hmm... lol) But it was beautifully written and I give you props on all your stories. They are addicting!! =D Keep up the work girl. Can't wait for the Epilogue!

aww i absolutely loved this story
it was for sure one of my favorites
you did an amazing job with this story and i will miss it

I honestly cant express into words how AMAZING this was. The story ending absolutly breaks my heart but you ended it in a way that I will get on in life haha. This has to be one of my favorite stories that Ive ever read on Mibba and you are one of the best writers on here, hands down. I cant wait for the moment that i recieve the update email on this story, i might actually scream out lound when that happens. I hope there will be another Parise story somewhere in the near future<3

I apologize now if my review isn't a novel. I'm really sick tonight and I didn't want to go to bed without commenting like I'd promised!!!

Throughout this entire journey, my fav character hands down has been Pheebs. And I know this story wasn't about them and that they weren't featured that much but her and Travis really captured my heart. They both seem so real; I feel as if they are just like any other normal couple walking down the street. They both have flaws, they've both made many mistakes, and they're both willing to look past that. They were real to me. Maybe because I seek reality in the stories I read and I like to think that these guys are just normal people. I don't want them being put up on pedestals or glorified. I want them to screw up and swear and have sex and get drunk and leave the toilet seat up and get into fights and all the other shit that make men, men. So I really do hope that Pheebs and Travis end up together. And you can't tell me I'm the only one that would have loved for her to knock boots with Zach at least once ;)

Zach is a broody bastard when he loses. I love that about him. I love that he's not totally wimpy and breaking down into tears and threatening to throw himself off a balcony and I love that he's not going out putting his hand through a wall or someone's face. He broods. He sulks. He bitches and moans a bit. I love that about them. He's got a good grip on shit. Good on you Zach.

As usual, you write smut exceptionally well. It's hot and tasteful. Not too over the top, know what I mean? Well I've never been a big fan of Jenna (you know my reasons) I have to say that in the end, she almost completely grew on me. And even in fan fiction land, I just want Dimples Parise to be happy. And if she's what makes him happy *shrugs* so be it.

I am definitely looking forward to the epilogue. Esp to see if there's a sneak peek of Pheebs and Travis!!

And remember....I love you bestest of all sweet cheeks...*smooches*

LOL Let the rumors and gossip begin...

Dude. I so knew they would get married. :) I can't wait for the epilogue :) And Phoebe better say yes to Travis :) Loved the update ;) :D :P :) :D:P :) :D:P

Great ending! Though i am sure everyone can agree that Jenna should have ended up with Marc! We can only think in our "staalistic" little minds that that may have happend!

Okay- I'm torn. I'm so sad this story is ending. I LOVED it. I love that you wrote it, but more specifically i love that you wrote it for me and about me. you dont' know how much that means to me and how much (i think) it speaks measures about our friendship.

I'm surprised it took jenna that long to tell phoebe. i have to admit, as much as i wanted them to talk about the huge event, i was secretly rooting for her not to say anything. i loved that she didn't just jump out of the shower and scream "we did it!" perhaps she was a little smug, but it's a very sensitive thing, and very delicate and she probably didn't even know where to begin.

I giggled at how nervous Zach was, maybe more nervous than me. He had been so worried about making it perfect, and now that it happened, spontaneously, unplanned, it had been just that. Perfect. The more I thought about last night, the more I missed Zach.-- she's quite in love isnt she? i don't see how you can't be in love with someone as perfect as him. i'd miss her every second he wasn't with me too.

I closed my eyes tightly, said good bye to Pheebs and headed home to await the stranger that was sure to come though my door, the guy who needed a break from me last time.-- this makes me so sad. its completely understandable why she'd feel this way. and realistically i totally would feel that way.

The Devils were her team, and now she had me,-- i'm seriously wishing that were true.

I leaned down and opened the tie on her robe without removing my mouth from hers. I used my hands to feel what she wore underneath. I didn’t need to see it to know what it was-- i love the imagery here. very sexy and sweet at the same time.

"I've been thinking," I said, jumping right into the thing that kept me up most of the night. "My team just lost in the first round of playoffs. I should be completely miserable, but I'm not."-- aw zach, see what happens when you let the girl you love be there for you. i love how he says this.

yeah, what can i say? i wish i was with this zach. he's perfect and he absolutely adores me. i dont think anything could compare. i love the way he looks at her, shes delicate and pure and he doesnt care about anything that stands in their way. that's commitment. i love the proposal and as nice as it would be to have a ring, the fact that he cant wait to propose, can't wait another second to beg her to be his wife...something about that is even sweeter. Lord knows i'd be screaming yes and hoping to march down that aisle before he changed his mind!

i LOVED this story (still do) OH, have i said that already? It's mine and it's wonderful and this might not be the best place to say this, but, i love you and i'm SOOO thankful we're friends. not just friends but great ones.

okay, sappy stuff over. i can't wait to read the last part, but i don't want it to end.
(and i still owe you a jordan comment. don't worry)

Awww that was so good! I loved it but I'm so sad it's over!

My legs ached, between my legs ached, but it was a good ache, and it served as a reminder of my night.
if zach parise gave you that ache.. it is FINE.

"Travis wants to get married. Married!!!! Is he insane. Sure he says not now, not even soon, but damn.  What makes him think I want to get married?”
hahahahhaa what a crazy thought.. pheobe being a housewife or someone's mother :p god i love her

"Yeah, about that," I said stepping out of the shower and giving her a smirk. "You are definitely going to have to start knocking."
HAHAHAHAHAHAHHAA!!!!!! no more walking in unannounced PLEASE.

Tell me everything. EVERYTHING! I need to know. Oh, maybe it was awful. Don't worry, lots of first times are awful. You'll have lots of time to practice.
HAHAHAHAH! oh no.. was it awful.. i'm sorry.. but i can't imagine it being awful with zach. noway.. too gorgeous.. too nice.. too SEXY. no way.

"I never thought I'd hear you say that Jenna girl. I thought I'd die before anyone popped your cherry, and now you want to do it again."
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. pheobe and jenna are total opposites. but phoebe thinks she is more of a prude than she is.. maybe that's cause she doesn't hear jenna's thoughts like we do.

The fucking flyers!
AMEN.

the stranger that was sure to come though my door, the guy who needed a break from me last time.
I'M GOING TO BE SO FUCKING PISSED IF HE ACTS LIKE AN ASSHOLE. HE DOES NOT GET TO TREAT HER LIKE SHIT BECAUSE THE SEASON DIDN'T GO THE WAY HE WANTED. you don't screw over the people who love you unconditionally.

Love Actually
LOVE THAT MOVIE!

My season had ended too early, but the worst part was letting Jenna down.
oh i love you zach *snugs*

Her eyes went wide. "What are you saying Zach? Do you want me to move in with you? Cuz I'm not sure…"

"I want you to marry me!"
FIRST OF ALL YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES!!!!!!!!!!!! YES! YES! YES!
second of all, how hilarious is that.. she's about to freak about moving in with him and he takes it to a whole three levels higher.. MARRY ME!love it :D

I want to make love to you and make babies with you.
BABIES BABIES! BABIES! YES YES YES YES YES! this chapter is making me so happy :D

what... this was so sudden...
or wait.. did you warn me... ohh ohh :( i love this story so much.
bUT YES TO AN EPILOGUE! YOU BETTER PUT BABIES IN THAT, DAMN IT! i DEMAND babies phoebe! babies or bust!
second of all, GIHFJESNFAJDJKAENW! STAALS! EEPP!
but i lovedddd this story sooo much! so much! so much i loved all of the characters and how sweet and innocent jenna was and how perfect she matched up with zach :D
I'm happy their going to be together forever aka the way it should be, and that their going to have BABIES together (make it happen.)
you need to write that soon. but.. i would be willing to wait.. for staals... RAWR!
im so excited.. i can't even form words!

The end of the story? Already?!
But...what about Phoebe? I'm not gonna lie, after Zach asked Jenna to marry him, she's the one I was thinking about and how she's supposed to marry Travis.
This was amazing and I loved reading it.
Also, yay for the Staals + Caitlin! So excited to read that :)

I love this story!!!!!
u do a great job at writing stories

I don't think that this could have a better ending than that right there. It was amazing. Zach is so sweet trying to give Jenna her fairy tale. I love that. And for a bit I thought that he might have gone back to how he was in the Olympics after the big loss, but I'm glad that I was wrong about that. This was an amazing story and I loved it. Amazing work. I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hmm, so that was so sweet I think I need to call my dentist.
I don't know why I'm commenting, I mean - no epilogue means faster Caitlin, and faster Teej!
But, I'm commenting because I love you
Good job, missy!

holy crap, I was not expecting that ! <3

That was perfect!

I am desperately, desperately in love with this story. Thanks to you, I'm kinda in love with Zach Parise now.

But I love you, so I guess I can let it slide. :)

It was a really great chapter!
And either another chapter or a sequel would be awesome (:

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. Finally. That was really cute :) I loved the ending part of the chapter :) :D:P :) :D:P :) :D:P

but she was gone, and it was just me in bed completely alone.
PHOEEEEBEEEEE WHY DO YOU TEASE LIKE THIS!?!?

I regretted that decision more every day.
me too zachary... me too...

I couldn't help but lean in and kiss her again, only quickly this time. "I'm sorry. I wasn't thinking…"
HERE WE GO THE THE TEASING AGAIN! WHAT!?!?! COMEEEE ON!!!!

so, you know I've been waiting for this since tehs econd you came out with the first chapter.. and I will throughly enjoy it.. but it's creepy to quote sex scenes.. idk.. maybe it's the virgin side of me ;)

Her shy, scared expression startled me a little, another reminder to go slow. "I'll take care of you baby. I promise."
oh zach <3 you are so precious.. :D only a real man focuses on the fact that he can't bang the hell out of her. he's right, it's not about him, it's about her.

My inner id
I TOTALL GET THIS! I TOTALLY DO! i'm in AP psych.. but I learned about that in ap euro last year too. frued right??

In the midst of it all, the fire and the excitement, one emotion got the best of me. One feeling over powered the lust and the desire. LOVE. I couldn't have loved the woman below me more. She was my be all and end all, my start and my beginning.
AWWWW!!! jenna is really getting her prince charming.. he loves her so much <3 MARRIAGE! AND BABIES! PLEAAAAASEEE!!!

OKAY! FIRST OF ALL, NEVER CAN THIS END. PERIOD.
SECOND OF ALL, HOLY SHIT! THAT WAS AMAZING PHOEBE!
EEEKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I was so engrossed in this that I couldn't even really say my comments- mostly because my jaw was open and I was like.. oh my god.
I was AWING during a SEX SCENE. He was SOOOOO aamzing to her, giving her all of this love and making sure it was alright.
it was perfect times a thousand passed my expectations and definitely worth the wait!!!!!!!!
and you already know that I'm demanding babies. because I want babies. and they would have ADORABLE babies! <3 <3 <3
pleaseee!!!!!!!! pleaseeeeee!!!!! zach babies are adorable!!!
EEPPP!! like, I'm so impressed with how zach was. and I love how he was like trying to wait and put thought into it when in reality things just happened the way they were supposed to. It was perfect even without the planning. plus, something planning can become rehearsed and it isn't what it was supposed to be. But this was really really really great :D I love it :D :D :D!!!!!
more soon.. even though you say you're taking a break.. I'm going to harass you for it ;)

btw, the picture at the top got me ready for that chapter :D bahahaha sex on ice.

FINALLY!
This was perfect.
I honestly could not have imagined it any better.
More soon. <3