September 11th, 2010 at 05:13am
Okay, I have to start this off by saying: anyone who has gripes about how the smut was written is most likely a virgin themself and has these fantastical ideas about what their first time is going to be like. Please girls, before you jump into the deed, do some research on the 'net or write into Cosmo for some advice so that you know what to expect and you're not left disappointed that you didn't have one of those 'bells ringing, angels singing, swing from the chandeliars' orgasms that you've all obviously got your hearts set on. First time sex hurts. In fact, the first couple of times do until you're used to it and (excuse the 'dirty' talk) stretched enough where it's no longer painfully uncomfortable. And the majority of women (virgin or legit 'pro') don't even have an orgasm during intercourse without some kind of other help. Sorry if that bursts your bubble, but you really need to get with reality so you're not left feeling extremely disappointed and jaded your first time around.
That being said, I am so glad that Zach and Jenna finally shit and got off the pot. I'm glad that she was able to let herself go and trust him with her body and her soul and I'm glad to see that he was able to stay so damn patient. Thank God for fan fiction. Guys like Zach Parise wouldn't hold out. Sorry. Sad but true. There's too many women willing ready and able to satisfy him and it's naive to think he's so perfect in real life. I love Zach as much as anyone, but I prefer my men 'real'. With faults and nuances and doing stupid ass shit like ALL guys.
The smut was extremely well written. Not too much, not too little. Perfect in between. I think she personally got the better end of the stick when it comes to first time experiences. At least she got off through oral. Most guys would be so turned on by the thought of sex with a virgin that they wouldn't waste time with the premilinary stuff.
I wouldn't mind a couple chapters to tie up all the loose ends in the future. Just to know what happened to them down the road.
i love that hes so into her, so in love with her that he's having massive wet dreams about her (me) whatever. lol. but he loves her so much, respects her so much that he wont act on it.
until...
he realizes that she loves him just as much as he loves her. she isn't some china doll he needs to be afraid to touch, shes the girl of his dreams and she wants to give the most special gift she has to him.
Clearly I wasn't myself, but rather than explain I took one step inside the door and kissed her like the sun may not come up tomorrow.- *swoon*
Her hands pushed up my t-shirt and wandered my abs and my chest until they tugged the shirt completely off.-- yum. *sigh* if only that were real life
I stood up again and pulled the band from her hair, letting her golden locks fall around her shoulders.-- such a guy thing to do lol
t wasn't until we were in the moment, so engulfed in each other that nothing else mattered, that I realized, this is how it should be, intense, passionate, explosive. In the midst of it all, the fire and the excitement, one emotion got the best of me. One feeling over powered the lust and the desire. LOVE. I couldn't have loved the woman below me more. She was my be all and end all, my start and my beginning.-- this might be one of my favorite lines from the story. i love how hes coming to terms with the fact that hes in love with her every way possible.
her experiences are so realistic. its not perfect the first time, and it definitely hurts...but knowing he loves her, is willing to take good care of her and is overly excited by being inside her is an amazing feeling. it almost makes the pain subside. almost. lol.
them having sex has put them on a different level obviously. he's more in love with her than he thought possible, and she is crazy in love with him (which he must know since she gave herself to him). i love it, its so heartwarming.
Suddenly everything in my life from the Olympics to my former relationship meant nothing, as I realized my whole world was tied up in the woman in my arms. It wasn’t the sex exactly, it was the gift. It wasn’t the heat or the passion, it was the love. It wasn’t the build-up, it was the ending.-- okay this might be my favorite line. (i just cant decide) i just love it. i've said it a millino times but his conclusions that hes ruined for all other women is delicious. it just makes my heart swell lol
i loved it phoebe, but you already knew that. thanks for taking my idea (kinda) :)
and you know i dont want it to end. at all. i'm willing for a sequel (and you kno what i wanna see them do...and where--LOL) love you (mucho!)