Too Blind to See It! - Comments

"You thought I was seeing a soccer player? Give me more credit than that. I need a real man Zach,"
HAHAHAHAH yesss my cousins were soccer players.. enough said.

"No soccer players, no Sidney Crosby. I'll give you whatever you want."
geee.. he spoils her.. :p hahahahah can i have him!?!? PLEASE!

"Wait...What? You think I don't want to have sex?"
well yes. because why else would you say no to zach parise...??? although, how you could EVER say no to that man is beyond me..

"Oh Zach. Nothing could be further from the truth. I want to have sex with you so bad that it consumes me sometimes. I wake up thinking about it and fall asleep thinking about it. I'm a bit obsessed really."
SHE IS HUMAN! SHE IS A WOMAN! YESSS!!!!!! god, and seriously, that is exactly how half of the female hockey fan population feels. hahahaha

All of a sudden it felt so easy. We were relaxed and laughing and happy again.
that is EXACTLY how it should be. happy, light, easy, perfect :D

Then suddenly Zach looked hurt misunderstanding what I'd said. "So you don't think there's a forever for us? Is that why you said no?"
ohh zachary <3

He scooped me into his arms. "I love you Jenna, and I promise I'll make love to you. You may not think you need the fairy tale, but I want to give it to you."
first of all, is it so bad that i just want them to bang the hell out of each other!? why do we need to talk about it so much.. JUST HAVE SEX! second of all, really zach. REALLY!? she was GIVING herself to you and you have to go be all nobel. sigh.. okay so i secretly love it.. but still! SO CLOSE! INCHES! SOO DAMN CLOSE!!!! FHAKLFMDA!

"That's great news Parise! That's fucking fantastic. You're finally going to get your rocks off and you can join the land of sexually active again. Good for you."
ONLY TRAVIS! BAHAHAHAHAHAHAH *DIES* what would phoebe say about the crude way he's talking about jenna's fairytale :p

"Whoa! You had sex and it was awful? Honey the first time usually isn't that great."
HAHAHAHAHAH!!!!! i love phoebe <3

Did you say you wanted to fuck instead of 'make love'? Men are so damn sensitive."
*DIES* HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA OHMYGOD THAT IS SO FUNNY.

I think you scared the fuck out of him, (pun unintended but it works)
HAJFHDAJFNDALMFNAS!!!!! HAHAHAHA THAT WAS A GOOD ONE! i am so cheesy. -.-

OKAY!
OKAY! OKAY!
COME ON SERIOUSLY!?!?!
there is ALL this talk abotu sex and i'm thinking.. OH! HERE IT IS! THE CHAPTER IS HERE!!! nope.
sigh. i guess i can wait ANOTHER CHAPTER :P
this was really really great! you know how much I love anything that has to do with zach so I was really happy to see an update!
I just realized I never read jordan..
but I will soon.. promise!
I need you to update this soon though.. because lets be honest.. there isn't enough zach love here :p

I don't blame Zach I think that would have freaked me out too. It will all be fine though and she'll get her fairy tale love making.

Hahahaha I loved the update ;) Zach is too sweet ;) He is so perfect in this ;) I loved the update :) :) :) :D:D:D:P:P:P

I can see why Jenna wanted to stay a virgin for as long as she has, but I also like how she's realistic about it as well when talking to Zach and telling him.I love that Zach said no, that he wants her first time to be perfect. Makes me swoon for him, lol. Oh and the talk with Phoebe, oh man I loved that!!!
I was soooo happy you found the time to update. Keep up the amazing work!!

So glad things are good between them again!!

I love it, I love it, I love it. But I want to know the same thing as Zach. Who the fuck is Aiden??? Haha :) Loved the update ;) :) :) :D :D:D:DP :P:P

Sorry this took so long to get to you!!!! There's been a little bit of drama over at my house. Nothing serious, just kid related. It's been like a three ring circus. So I'm sorry if this comment isn't up to my usual standards. It's been a long, long night and I'm still exhausted.

You know, there's something phenomenally sexy about a man when they're jealous. I don't know what it is, but when they've got all that angst and drama and anger all mixing together in their bodies and they're like growling, nasty bears that are desperate to regain their territory, there's just something so damn HAWT about it. And it's even hotter when it's Zach Parise in one of those moods, know what I mean? But jealous of a soccer player, Zach? Are you for real? They're just dudes that lack the intestinal fortitude or the testosterone needed to play a real sport. Can't hack the toughness so they'd rather put on their little shorts and high socks and kick a ball around the field. Might as well just go ahead and put on some tartan skirts as well.

The soccer player is in love with Zach. Not Jenna. I am convinced. I think blue balls has got a massive boy crush on Mister Parise and he's hanging around Jenna hoping to get a sneaky peeky at Zach's goods. That's my theory and I'm sticking to it.

I seriously hope Pheebs and Travis hook up for the happily ever after, always and forever. Most believable couple in this story are those two. Neither are perfect, both have issues and both are made for eachother. What more could you ask for?

Jerry Maquire reference! LOL. I just watched that movie for about the fifteen time last night. I hated it when I was younger, now that I'm older and sappier, certain parts make me sniffle. And that little boy is just presh....but I'm so glad that you tossed a JM reference in. Made me giggle.

And it was no problem for the help! Anytime!! Glad to be of service!!!!

Love ya!!!

OMG!! I love it!!!
I'm dead tired and have to wake up soon, so forgive me for the lame attempt at the comment.
I love how jealous Zach was of Aiden the soccer player, hehe
I'm so happy things are looking up for them. Love it!!
Great work!!!

Okay, if a pro hockey player put an ad for me in the freakin' NY Times I'd definitely forgive him.
Plus, it's Zach Parise.
You can't be mad at that face for too long.
Oh & as for Travis, slow down there, boy!
More soon. <3

Aiden, a fucking soccer player?
i'm just going to say that he bats for the other team. he isn't in to jenna. not at all.

“You’re about two weeks too late for that, now if you’ll excuse me.”
JENNA! DON'T BE MEAN! YOU ARE MEANT TO BE TOGETHER! BE NIIICE!

“I want to know what’s going on with you and blue balls over there.”
BAHAHAHAHAHA zach i loooove you :D

“I think I have a right to know if you’re seeing someone else Jenna?  Soccer’s a great sport you know, for guys who can’t skate.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHA THIS MAKES MY FUCKING LIFE! OHMYGOD!!!! SOOOO TRUE!!!! BAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!! I DIED BEST LINE EVER!!!!!

Oh yeah, she was mad, but I’d rather be there with her, letting her yelling at me, then on the other side of the door wondering what the fuck was going on, on the other side.
he does have a point.. it is better to be face to face knowing exactly what is going on than having to wonder

Jen, he calls her Jen? What the fuck? “Mind your own fucking business ball boy.”
HAHAHAHAHA OH MY GOD I FUCKING DIIIED!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAH THAT IS SOOOOOO FUNNY!

“I always told Jenna she should be a Rangers fan. The Devils must be hurting if they’ve resorted to this type of PR. Why don’t you go knock on the next door and try to get fans there.”
holy shit. fuck zach punching him.. LET ME AT HIM! DON'T YOU BE TALKING TO ZACH PARISE THAT WAY BALL BOY!

no lie. im kinda pissed at jenna. what the fuck is she doing to their relationship!?!? seriously! her and zahc belong together and she needs to knock it off with that fucking duuude! she doesnt love him. she loves zach and i know he was an asshole but this is ridic! she is acting just like him! in real life it would be okay to be mean to him, but not in this story damn it!

or he’d be bailing me out of jail when I went back to kick the shit out of that pansy ass soccer player.
hell yeah zach. you should have done the other option.. although.. i guess that wouldn't have been good for PR.. fucking aiden.

I glared at him trying to decide if I should ring his neck or answer his question. In the best interest of the team I went with the latter.
HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA. good choice zach :D

All whiney about the color of your fucking medal.
that is a really good way of putting it. wow.. trav you should smart with phoebe writing you.

“I’m going to ask Phoebe to marry me.”
*EYES BUG OUT OF HEAD* WHAAAAAAT!?!?!?!?! shut the fuck up. she wouldn't say yes... no way... ohmygod. trav.

You won’t be the only one going without sex.
so trav.. is this about zach and jenna.. or is this about you and phoebe??? lol

“You tell her I’m going to give Jenna her fairy tale.”
I love you zach.. I love love love love you!

"Flowers aren't very original Jen."
who the fuck asked for your opinion..?? OH YEAH! no one. -.-

and a cup of Starbucks.
zach had me at starbucks.. 100% forgiven

ZACHARY! I LOVE YOU!!! JENNA! FORGIVE HIM! NOW!

the one that (to risk a bad quote from Jerry McGuire) completed me
corn city. i laughed my ass off when i watched that movie a few months ago. it was too funny to take seriously. i was dying. im laughing just thinking about it

Our bodies were touching and our hearts were touching
love that! such a great way to describe it

... what. no winding down... shut up!
you know what that means? you'll have to start thinking of a new zach parise story.
I'll do a new one if you do :p
bahahahaha. oh god. i need to stop making deals.
anyway, this was really really great.
and I think the time table was good.. but i really want to know who the fuck this aiden kid is. cause i dont like him.. and i really hope he is gone from the story.
so i've decided you aren't allowed to end this until zach and jenna are married and have at least one baby. i wont complain if its more.
but seriously.. THEY NEED TO HAVE BABIES! IT IS A SHAME NOT TO REPLICATE ZACH!
i loved this..
and you need to update more :p

i love seeing him so distraught outside her apartment with aiden in it. it's hilarious. you can sense the rage and jealousy and hurt he's feeling, and he deserves to be feeling it.

“We need to talk,” I replied through gritted teeth.-- he's so desperate and you can see it. i love this.

I could see her getting visibly irritated with me. It reflected in those beautiful eyes. I reached for her hand, but she pulled it away. “I don’t think you deserve anything. How about I call you in two weeks and explain then Zach? How would that work for you?” Oh yeah, she was mad, but I’d rather be there with her, letting her yelling at me, then on the other side of the door wondering what the fuck was going on, on the other side.-- i love that you can tell he really does love her, and i love that she's got a little sass with him.

"Tell me something Zach. Why the hell did you get involved with her if you couldn't handle not having sex? It's not as though she kept her virginity a secret from you. You knew how she felt going in."-- so very true

I rolled my eyes at him then finished the rest of my beer. “Tell her I’m on this. Tell Phoebe that I love Jenna, and I’m not giving up. Not by a long shot.” I threw some cash down on the bar. Somewhere in my conversation with Travis, while he talked about spending the rest of his life with Pheebs, it dawned on me…I want that too and I want it with Jenna. I want a happily ever after. “You tell her I’m going to give Jenna her fairy tale."-- hell yeah you better zach!

I swung the door open to find what had to be two dozen white roses. They were held together in a bouquet by a sky blue ribbon. I bent down and took in their breathtaking beauty, so simple and pure, almost honest in a way.--- awww i would melt, you got me to a t! lol

the roses and the card? perfect. he knows he cant just go over there with a big speech. he messed up bad and pouring on some sugar helps get in good graces again. (at least in my book) I def would have started to forgive him...but not just yet.

"I brought you some breakfast." He held out a white paper bag that smelled like heaven, clearly a chocolate croissant from the bakery down the street, and a cup of Starbucks.--okay, slowly but surely you're getting there...

Okay...the full page apology? I think i forgive you now Zach. I'm just waiting for you to scoop me up into your arms and kiss me....oh wait....
His lips pressed hot against mine and his free hand found the small of my back and held me there against him.-- thhhheeerrrrreeeee we go. ;)

okay, i've tortured you long enough dearest zach. i think i'm ready to tell who aiden is. hehe.

i LOVED it! thank you for my fairytale lol. Zach's quite the man--when he wants to be lol. Anyone who doesnt like it or bitches about anything can shove it. its your story and you write it so beautifully. thanks for taking the time out of your schedule to write and update this story. i dont want to see it end, but i'm holding out hope that a sequel is in the future....? maybe? please? okay, sorry. love you!

So, where were those things you were telling me about? Was it here or did I make a wrong turn somewhere?
I loved it. I loved how they fought at first, but when Zach grovelled and begged that she came back and they're gonna try and kame it work again. :)
More soon, please

Awe I'm happy for her!

And to me for blue balls eh? Lol. Loved it - and no, I don't think the resolution was too fast! Awesome!!! More please (and you know what I mean by more rofl!)

Great chapter
the newspaper thing was cute, but I personally would've liked him to be a little more heart felt
well more than 3 lines atleast. And not the exact same lines from the flowers
I'm one for those dramatic tear jerking speeches :)
so yeah...
Update soon please

Ahhhhhhhh. My life has been made. I read this entire story on my phone in the middle of the night- hiding under a blanket fort. AHMAZING!

Please please let the soccer player be a brother or cousin or someone other than her boyfriend. Zachary needs to start working on his charm again and get her to forgive him.

I can't wait till the next update!!!!!

Love it so far! and glad for the soccer player maybe it'll light a fire under zachs butt!

I know Zach was frustrated and upset but goodness he didn't need to be such a jerk!
glad he realized his mistake though.
I'd really like to know what's going on with this Aiden character and what Jenna's doing with him...
can't wait for more!

I think Zach is really frustrated in more ways than one here; and Jenna has some issues of her own. I think she still wants her fairytale and is only just starting to understand all the realities a grown up, real sexual relationship with a man you love comprises. I also think her background is coming into play here and maybe Zach doesn't quite understand that; that maybe Jenna thinks that once she gives in and does the deed (I couldn't figure out a less corny way to say it, sorry lol) then Zach will leave her, once he's got what he wants. I do think this is her big subconscious fear here.

I think Jenna needs to let go and go with all the feelings he's eliciting from her and that sometimes things don't have to be perfectly set to be perfect. Because HOT DAMN - if that had been me, I wouldn't have stopped. Let go Jenna! Or let hi
Min and see yur deepest needs and desires. The poor guy isn't a mind-reader!

Nice little kicker twist in the end there too!!

Great chaprter I loved it and can't wait to read more.
It's also pretty cool since it's the first time I read about the olympics from the US point og view