June 20th, 2010 at 03:05am
My Calamity - Comments
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I like it.June 19th, 2010 at 08:03pm
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One word, Amazing! Haha. Update! :DJune 19th, 2010 at 07:24pm
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I LOVE IT!
UPDATE SOON.June 19th, 2010 at 07:17am -
This is just an amazing story so far! <3
Love it!
Well done. :D
Your descriptions are very good and your writing style is simple, yet unique.
Lovely!
I have subscribed. :3
<3June 19th, 2010 at 06:02am -
I love it.June 18th, 2010 at 10:34pm
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The layout is awesome.
I like the way this is written.
It's very smooth and you make it seem simple, yet intense.
Which I love, it's a very pleasant read so far and I'm only half way through the chapter.
I did notice one thing though.
When some speaks for example:
"You should dye your hair." Lexie says turning - it should actually be a comma after the word hair, because you have Lexie says. If it's an action then yes it would be a period.
Does that make sense?
Great job of this and the description is wonderful.June 18th, 2010 at 09:26pm -
I like this. I love the little images you have.
And your character biographies.
Oh, just as a reminder, please credit me for the graphic I made you.June 18th, 2010 at 09:24pm -
I really like this.
It's pretty good description-wise and the complexity of the characters is great.
:DJune 18th, 2010 at 09:17pm -
Wow, this is really good. I love the characters, and I love how the sisters act. I like that Penelope is happy in her own skin, and I loved the last line. I really want to see where this goes, and I can't wait to meet Patrick!June 18th, 2010 at 09:12pm
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So, this is really wonderful.
Everything flows really well, and you have the perfect amount of description.June 18th, 2010 at 09:07pm -
http://i374.photobucket.com/albums/oo185/rosiegal16/tumblr_l45vud5Q3W1qag73jo1_500_l-1.jpg
Just made that really quicklyJune 18th, 2010 at 08:54pm -
This is absoultely amazing so far.
I love the details. I can really feel what she feels.
Excellent job.
*subscribes*June 18th, 2010 at 08:42pm
The beginning really explains pretty much her personality.
The common mistake seems to be dialogue tags as Gyllenhaal. had mentioned above. Also when it is the end of a character's voice, there isn't a comma, use a period.
Ex: "Here we go." not "Here we go,"
Also I think you might want to capitalize Mom, a direct address.