On the Outskirts of Manhattan - Comments

Wooooo hoooo time to kick some enemy ass, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

So... for some reason... I saw Luther and was like, "Wait, I thought he died! NO. That was LUCIAN." Hahaha.

The men turned to Felix. “Alexander Sterling has been terminated.”

Not sure how I felt about Alex, but I don't think I hated him enough to want him to die. lol

“Suit up,” Riley stated and each man turned around and left her there with the dangerous weapons made for her and only her.

TEEHEE. WEAPONS.

... I had to re-read the paragraph where Ava was crying because I was like, "Wait, what? Who died?! I'm confused!" Then I was like, "OHHH..."

GREAT UPDATE!

Dun dun dun!!! Time to kick some butt ava! Love it bye the way waitin for the update! :)

I have freakin goosebumps I can't wait for more!! Hopefully soon. Great updates!!

MorningDoveofLight:

Poor Alex. :(

He could be an ass but he was a good character. Great alpha!! I'm going to miss him.

I love how descriptive your writing is. :)

THANK YOU! :D I never think of my writing as descriptive....I feel like I could do better at that (and a bunch of other things :/)

JamieJo:

Even though I felt that Alex wasn't very nice I kind of miss him now that he's gone </3

Only 3 chapters left?! D,: </3 </3

I feel like every time I kill off a character, everyone gets upset....haha. I also don't feel like I portrayed Alex quite as jerk-ish as I wanted...I will fix that...at some point :P

Yep. 3 chapters and an epilogue (which is the same length as a normal chapter).

Sunny-Lee <3

Even though I felt that Alex wasn't very nice I kind of miss him now that he's gone </3

Only 3 chapters left?! D,: </3 </3

Poor Alex. :(

He could be an ass but he was a good character. Great alpha!! I'm going to miss him.

I love how descriptive your writing is. :)

After further deliberation, Alex lunged forward through the pain of his chest wound, attacking wolf after wolf. Blood was pouring everywhere as he went for the quickest deaths—ripping out throats with his powerful jaws. There were carcasses all around him, blood soaking in to water the earth. He let his wolf take over his body. No human thoughts. No human emotions. No human hinderances. He felt the urge to kill, to attack and to protect his pack. They were his to protect.

-I love the description. It's so clear. For some reason, I'm extremely saddened by it. Haha. I'm also saddened by Alex's now-nothingness... though I never favored him much.

“Suit up boys.”

-I don't know why... but it makes me chuckle. Hahaha.

Once Nolan was strapped in and they were flooring it, she glanced at him. “Explain.”

-Cue action scene! :D

Great update... two more weeks before there will be more... Ahhhhh. It's great. ^_^

yay!

Love it!!!! I want to read moore:)

Love it, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

Well I tried to comment on the last update but don't think it posted. Anyway loved the quick new update! Still loving this story and can't wait to see what happens next!

JamieJo:

'“I will follow you wherever you need to go.” '

^^Awwww!!!! Yay! (If it isn't too obvious, I kinda love Dawson...I'm just so darn forgiving...)

But I'm worried about whats gonna happen to Ava next...

Update soon!

Haha :)

I also love Dawson. His character sort of....grows in the last few chapters of this story. So you get to look forward to that :)

Yes. Always be worried about Ava She seems to get herself into trouble.

'“I will follow you wherever you need to go.” '

^^Awwww!!!! Yay! (If it isn't too obvious, I kinda love Dawson...I'm just so darn forgiving...)

But I'm worried about whats gonna happen to Ava next...

Update soon!

1) I do NOT want Nolan in the pack... >.<
2) I'm still upset with Dawson.
3) I am worried about what's going to happen next... O_O

AHHHHH. >_< GREAT update, Sunny. ^_^ Keep up the good work. I always look forward to your updates. Hehe.

I love love love this story and can't wait till you update again :D

I've only read the prologue for now – I think you know why – but I like this so far! I can tell you've put a lot of thought into this; it shows. What I really love is that you didn’t tone down the werewolf thing – the violence is gruesome, but I think it makes for a more interesting story. I’m going to have to put the prequel to this on my reading list.

The first thing that comes into my mind when I read the summary is how creative this is. When someone can come up with an entire world for a story, I'm shocked. I just cannot do it. I've tried, but so many details need to be made up and fall through the cracks and I forget to not just put in my current way of life.

You've done a great job, so far. I love the idea of the Council and the problems that something like that would create. Your main character, Joshua, seems like someone who would just be incredibly interesting to read about. A good main character is important, the reader needs to like them, because that's who we're seeing through.

I love the layout, as well. It took me a minute to decide whether I liked it or not, because it's a little busy, but I really do like it. The banner doesn't really fit in, color-wise, but it isn't something that really stands out so it isn't a huge deal.

Overall, this story is really impressive. All the details you're putting in to create this world are really amazing.

JamieJo:

Woah... Ava and Dawson aren't, like, finished are they?? D:

Despite my sadness at the thought of them no longer being in a sort of relationship, if it can be called that, I feel like Dawson had a point about Ava never listening to him. So I'm kinda glad he stood up for himself. I can't stand the long wait to see how Ava deals with his outburst and if Dawson forgives Ava for never listening! This is gonnna be torture!

Congrats on your position on the mibba staff and good luck on you LSATs! :D

That is one of those questions that you ask but don't actually want me to answer. So,

But yes, Ava is very headstrong. She follows everything SHE wants and doesn't listen to anyone else, which is cool because she's pretty darn powerful anyways, so it's not like she's in THAT much danger....but....then, since she IS that powerful, she sort of IS in that much danger. Haha. I think this was about the time that I realized that Dawson was also super powerful and wouldn't really put up with crap, especially Ava wounding his pride by protecting him against Riley.

Thank you :)

Woah... Ava and Dawson aren't, like, finished are they?? D:

Despite my sadness at the thought of them no longer being in a sort of relationship, if it can be called that, I feel like Dawson had a point about Ava never listening to him. So I'm kinda glad he stood up for himself. I can't stand the long wait to see how Ava deals with his outburst and if Dawson forgives Ava for never listening! This is gonnna be torture!

Congrats on your position on the mibba staff and good luck on you LSATs! :D