On the Outskirts of Manhattan - Comments

:< NOOOO!!

“You're the one that got me into this mess! You never listen to me! I have a tactile plan! One that wouldn't have made you destroy several innocent wolves! You wouldn't have been touched! Riley wouldn't be flipping out on me! YOU NEVER LISTEN!” Dawson yelled at her.

Oy. This chapter was like a rollercoaster for me. I went from O_O to D: to :) aww, back to D:

And now I'm sad because I also liked Ava and Dawson and now I'm sad. lol

Guess I shall be waiting for two weeks to come. Hahah.

I loved the update! :) You're an awesome writer!

And good luck on your LSATs. I have a friend taking his June 10th and he's super stressed from all the studying. But anywho, like I stated before, good luck!!

Poor Ava and Dawson...I really like them together...:(

OH. MY. GOD.
WHY MUST YOU TORMENT ME...?
I want more, Sunny... MORE!
Hahaha.
But as always, it was a spectacular update.
I'm so worried about Nolan. >_<

JamieJo:

Such an amazing update! I just got the chance to read it, ever since I saw the update notification a few days ago I was like "I must read it!" but I had way too much stuff to do. Anyways, I made time to read it this morning an I LOVED it (as usual). You always deliver such amazing chapters its hard to believe you're not a published author.

I love seeing how Riley reacted to seeing Ava in danger, I can't say exactly why, but I think its because it was a different side to the calm, cool, and collected Riley I've come to know. And then I loved the part where Dawson is brought out by the guards and Ava is like "what are you doing here?" and he just shrugs and proceeds to kick some werewolf butt haha!

I can't wait to see what happens next, I have so many questions rattling around in my brain!

Aww :) Thank you! That means a lot :) Especially because I just started going over GWM and I'm like "how did I not notice all of these errors before? Why has no one commented that I'm completely inept at making sentences flow? Haha. But, I must admit, OTOOM is (probably) better at flowing sentences than GWM. Haha.

I love Riley :) He is, by far, my favourite character. I shouldn't choose favourites...but he is. Haha.

Fun fact: Originally, Dawson and Ava showed up on site together and Ava killed everyone outside (instead of simply incapacitating them) and Dawson went around to the other door and got captured and Ava had to save him. But then I realized that a) Ava is much faster/better/quicker/more talented then everyone else, and why would she wait for Dawson to go save her son, and b) Dawson's a bad ass himself. He is one of the most trained and dominant wolves on the planet, so why would he have to be saved from a random slew of other guards? Haha.

If you have questions...ask away. I might give you answers, but I'll probably just giggle and give you vague answers. Haha :)

Sunny-Lee <3

JamieJo:

Such an amazing update! I just got the chance to read it, ever since I saw the update notification a few days ago I was like "I must read it!" but I had way too much stuff to do. Anyways, I made time to read it this morning an I LOVED it (as usual). You always deliver such amazing chapters its hard to believe you're not a published author.

I love seeing how Riley reacted to seeing Ava in danger, I can't say exactly why, but I think its because it was a different side to the calm, cool, and collected Riley I've come to know. And then I loved the part where Dawson is brought out by the guards and Ava is like "what are you doing here?" and he just shrugs and proceeds to kick some werewolf butt haha!

I can't wait to see what happens next, I have so many questions rattling around in my brain!

Aww :) Thank you! That means a lot :) Especially because I just started going over GWM and I'm like "how did I not notice all of these errors before? Why has no one commented that I'm completely inept at making sentences flow? Haha. But, I must admit, OTOOM is (probably) better at flowing sentences than GWM. Haha.

I love Riley :) He is, by far, my favourite character. I shouldn't choose favourites...but he is. Haha.

Fun fact: Originally, Dawson and Ava showed up on site together and Ava killed everyone outside (instead of simply incapacitating them) and Dawson went around to the other door and got captured and Ava had to save him. But then I realized that a) Ava is much faster/better/quicker/more talented then everyone else, and why would she wait for Dawson to go save her son, and b) Dawson's a bad ass himself. He is one of the most trained and dominant wolves on the planet, so why would he have to be saved from a random slew of other guards? Haha.

If you have questions...ask away. I might give you answers, but I'll probably just giggle and give you vague answers. Haha :)

Sunny-Lee <3

JamieJo:

Such an amazing update! I just got the chance to read it, ever since I saw the update notification a few days ago I was like "I must read it!" but I had way too much stuff to do. Anyways, I made time to read it this morning an I LOVED it (as usual). You always deliver such amazing chapters its hard to believe you're not a published author.

I love seeing how Riley reacted to seeing Ava in danger, I can't say exactly why, but I think its because it was a different side to the calm, cool, and collected Riley I've come to know. And then I loved the part where Dawson is brought out by the guards and Ava is like "what are you doing here?" and he just shrugs and proceeds to kick some werewolf butt haha!

I can't wait to see what happens next, I have so many questions rattling around in my brain!

Aww :) Thank you! That means a lot :) Especially because I just started going over GWM and I'm like "how did I not notice all of these errors before? Why has no one commented that I'm completely inept at making sentences flow? Haha. But, I must admit, OTOOM is (probably) better at flowing sentences than GWM. Haha.

I love Riley :) He is, by far, my favourite character. I shouldn't choose favourites...but he is. Haha.

Fun fact: Originally, Dawson and Ava showed up on site together and Ava killed everyone outside (instead of simply incapacitating them) and Dawson went around to the other door and got captured and Ava had to save him. But then I realized that a) Ava is much faster/better/quicker/more talented then everyone else, and why would she wait for Dawson to go save her son, and b) Dawson's a bad ass himself. He is one of the most trained and dominant wolves on the planet, so why would he have to be saved from a random slew of other guards? Haha.

If you have questions...ask away. I might give you answers, but I'll probably just giggle and give you vague answers. Haha :)

Sunny-Lee <3

Such an amazing update! I just got the chance to read it, ever since I saw the update notification a few days ago I was like "I must read it!" but I had way too much stuff to do. Anyways, I made time to read it this morning an I LOVED it (as usual). You always deliver such amazing chapters its hard to believe you're not a published author.

I love seeing how Riley reacted to seeing Ava in danger, I can't say exactly why, but I think its because it was a different side to the calm, cool, and collected Riley I've come to know. And then I loved the part where Dawson is brought out by the guards and Ava is like "what are you doing here?" and he just shrugs and proceeds to kick some werewolf butt haha!

I can't wait to see what happens next, I have so many questions rattling around in my brain!

babywolf100:

So...in two days I read both of your stories. I was sad when it said I was all caught up! You're stories are amazing and if it does get published you can bet that I'd buy it and re-read it!

I can't wait for your next update :)

Aww :) That's so sweet!

Since I just finished writing this one (not all of the chapters have been posted yet, obviously), I'm just about to go back and try and make GWM the very best it can be. So thank you :) So, even if you did buy it and read it again, you'd get to see new scenes and it would be slightly different anyways :P

Sunny-Lee <3

So...in two days I read both of your stories. I was sad when it said I was all caught up! You're stories are amazing and if it does get published you can bet that I'd buy it and re-read it!

I can't wait for your next update :)

That messed up, so I'm posting it again...

JamieJo:

Ava is such an amazing character! I just can't get over how complex she is, as well as her originality. She is no damsel in distress, she can hold her own in a fight and win it most of the time. But she has her weaknesses, something every character must have yet many people write their characters as all powerful Gods. Dawson is an equally amazing character and I'm so happy for Ava and him, if it was anyone else I would be outraged, but Dawson seems to fit Ava in a way that she deserves. He is just so protective and caring yet strong and brave. All in all, every single one of your characters are absolutely amazing.

I would have to say that I love every single aspect of your story, from the characters to the dept of the plot, this story is just perfect <3<3<3

And yay for weekly updates!!! Woohoo!!! :D

THANK YOU! I have tried a bit harder this time around to give Ava more flaws because she is sort of this all powerful God type deal....and I feel like I STILL haven't given her noticeable enough flaws, because she's so....powerful and doesn't put up with crap. But I'm glad someone sees it :)

I'm also really glad you like all my characters. I have favourites....which is horrible. And oddly enough is not Ava, but is actually Riley and Lucian (from GWM).

I'm glad you like the characters and the plot and think this story is perfect :) You are amazing.

Yay! Weekly updates....Did I say weekly updates? Because I feel like I meant bi-weekly....like,e very second week...I'm thinking it might be Tuesdays or Thursdays that I'm going to update instead of Saturdays...but we'll see :)

Sunny-Lee <3

quote="JamieJo"]Ava is such an amazing character! I just can't get over how complex she is, as well as her originality. She is no damsel in distress, she can hold her own in a fight and win it most of the time. But she has her weaknesses, something every character must have yet many people write their characters as all powerful Gods. Dawson is an equally amazing character and I'm so happy for Ava and him, if it was anyone else I would be outraged, but Dawson seems to fit Ava in a way that she deserves. He is just so protective and caring yet strong and brave. All in all, every single one of your characters are absolutely amazing.

I would have to say that I love every single aspect of your story, from the characters to the dept of the plot, this story is just perfect <3<3<3

And yay for weekly updates!!! Woohoo!!! :DTHANK YOU! I have tried a bit harder this time around to give Ava more flaws because she is sort of this all powerful God type deal....and I feel like I STILL haven't given her noticeable enough flaws, because she's so....powerful and doesn't put up with crap. But I'm glad someone sees it :)

I'm also really glad you like all my characters. I have favourites....which is horrible. And oddly enough is not Ava, but is actually Riley and Lucian (from GWM).

I'm glad you like the characters and the plot and think this story is perfect :) You are amazing.

Yay! Weekly updates....Did I say weekly updates? Because I feel like I meant bi-weekly....like,e very second week...I'm thinking it might be Tuesdays or Thursdays that I'm going to update instead of Saturdays...but we'll see :)

Sunny-Lee <3

Ava is such an amazing character! I just can't get over how complex she is, as well as her originality. She is no damsel in distress, she can hold her own in a fight and win it most of the time. But she has her weaknesses, something every character must have yet many people write their characters as all powerful Gods. Dawson is an equally amazing character and I'm so happy for Ava and him, if it was anyone else I would be outraged, but Dawson seems to fit Ava in a way that she deserves. He is just so protective and caring yet strong and brave. All in all, every single one of your characters are absolutely amazing.

I would have to say that I love every single aspect of your story, from the characters to the dept of the plot, this story is just perfect <3<3<3

And yay for weekly updates!!! Woohoo!!! :D

Fly With Wings.:

I love your stories so much, especially GWM but right now. I'm crying. I'm balling my eyes out because HER AND Dawson get romantically involved.

I just, I can't get over Greyson and I can't stand dawson for being a distraction from her love. This is really depressing :"""(

Awww! I TOTALLY know what you're feeling. I was super surprised how people accepted Dawson so quickly when I don't think I will ever get over Grey. Grey is basically the man who I see as my soulmate. But there's a lot of Grey's characteristics in Dawson, like his protectiveness and his pondering charm.

But you have to remember that Grey's dead. He isn't coming back. And it's been 4 years since the ending of the last story. And Ava deserves to move on, and so does Dawson.

And you have to admit, Dawson is a sweetheart. I love him too, especially since the last chapter I wrote (I'm about 7 chapters ahead of you guys).

So, what I'm saying is that it's okay that you're upset because she's moving on from Grey, but you should also open up to the possibility that Dawson is amazing too. :)

Sunny-Lee <3

I love your stories so much, especially GWM but right now. I'm crying. I'm balling my eyes out because HER AND Dawson get romantically involved.

I just, I can't get over Greyson and I can't stand dawson for being a distraction from her love. This is really depressing :"""(

:) that's all i can say right now. :) YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

JamieJo:

Oh no!!!!! Not poor little Nolan!!! D:

Is it bad that everytime Dawson and Ava are in a situation together all I think is "kiss, kiss, kiss!" haha!

Hahaha! No, that's not bad at all. It means I'm doing my job right :)
Sunny-Lee <3

Oh no!!!!! Not poor little Nolan!!! D:

Is it bad that everytime Dawson and Ava are in a situation together all I think is "kiss, kiss, kiss!" haha!

HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHHAHHAHA!!! HAHAHHAA.

“What are you doing here?” she sneered, pulling at the door handle to the fridge. There was a loud creaking noise, the sound of something tearing and suddenly Ava held the whole door to the refrigerator in her hand. Ava stared wide-eyed at the door in her hand as things fell off of the shelves and onto the floor. A jar of pickles broke and that broke her out of her daze. She grabbed onto the door with both hands and suctioned the two halves together again. “I owe you a fridge,” she stated calmly.

I REMEMBERED!! And I literally LAUGHED OUT LOUD for a good bit before re-reading that whole scene again and laughing... AGAIN! Hahahahaahhaha.

Oh, that chapter was fun! :3 Ahhhh. You're totally awesome, Sunny. XD

I absolutely love this story!!! You're an amazing writer!! :)

I love how you portray your characters. I feel like I'm in the story, watching everything happen. :)

Awesomesauce job!! :)

Not Nolan the jack ass can't hurt him unless he wants to die!!!!! Updat asap!!! Please lol love anna