Fairest - Comments

I love the animal gif! so adorable! and this story is so great! it is only chapter two and I'm hooked and excited for updates! you're an impeccable writing by the way.... the flow, grammar (I saw two small errors... not sure exactly where), and the plot are all perfect! it is ridiculous I feel I am reading a novel, not a story off the internet! :D

I really like this idea! I love when people take a fairytale and put their own spin on it! Your writing is very easy to follow and pulls the reader in to the world created and your layout fits so well and is stunning :D

Well, I was sent here by comment swap, and I have to say that I'm glad for it! When I first read the summary, I wasn't completely sure about the story, but upon proceeding into chapter one, I was immediately entranced. You have a very unique and gifted writing style, and your vocabulary is spectacular. You also have a good plot in mind that I'm interested to see where it goes; all in all, I didn't catch any grammar mistakes, and I'm loving what I see so far. :) Update soon!

I love that you switched up a fairy tale and gave it a twist. It makes the story interesting and exciting. I love the layout, too. It's beautiful :) nice job!

I'm totally subscribing to this, I love fairy tale remakes and this one seems amazing
so far so good, keep it up

I'm really glad I stumbled upon this story, it's a really interesting spin on the original! :D
Great,, well-written chapter, and I hope to see another update soon!

I'm a sucker for redone fairytales. But in your description it says "So naturally, when the title goes to a fourteen year old girl? Naturally, many people are . . . concerned." Perhaps take out the repetition of "naturally?"

Despite that, you have a nice way of writing and I'm interested to see where this goes.

First thing I'd like to say is, I love your layout. Next, this is a truly amazing story so far. I love how snow white isn't like the other princess but instead a business woman.
I don't really know why, but the name Robin makes me think of Robin Hood. Anyway update soon! I want to read more.

Sent by the comment swap :) this is a really good idea! I love it. It's written very well and the time period seems to interesting! It's very well written and I LOVED the bit about once upon a time at the beginning. Good job!

Comment swap~
and, I must say, I got an absolute gem this time!

I mean, holy freakin' crap! This is awesome! It's not just awesome, I would dare say that it is super special awesome! *is shot*

But, seriously, this is amazing! I was pulled in right from the summary! And, to repeat everyone else, your layout is beautiful, and I am jealous *laughs*

I mean, this could've been just another fairy-tale deconstruction story but, it's not. It is something in and of itself: and it is, as I said before, most awesome. I love the writing style; it's fun to read, and the voice is engaging. Of course, I also love just how genre savvy it is (and, as a tropette, I was quite pleased with the mention of tropes ;D).

Man...I could go on forever about this...but, I just want to say one thing: if I could, I would hug you through my computer *sends internet hug* because, oh my God, this is simply amazing, I love it, and I will definitely reccomend and subscribe! Good luck n_n~*

Hola!
First of all, I love your layout. It's so beautiful!
Second of all, your writing style is amazing O_O I love the first set of paragraphs that are in italics. That really grabbed my attention. Also, I like that this is a Snow White story. I've seen other stories with fairytale characters but not Snow White. So yay for you :D Your first chapter is all well thought out altogether too. I'm definitely subscribing and recommending. I can't wait for more :D

You're a brilliant author- I'll just start by saying that. Your writing style is amazing, and just this first chapter is so well-thought-out. Definitely subscribed. Love the layout as well. Keep writing- I'm definitely going to go find any other stories by you and snap them up as soon as possible.
Can't wait for the next chapter. xo -C

Comment swap sent me here.

Firstly, your layout is absolutely gorgeous! I really do think it's pretty. I adore the idea of having a Snow White story, it's something I have honestly never seen before.

The first paragraph of the story is absolutely amazing. Just...wow. You have such a way with words, and your descriptions really are flawless. Your writing style is truly beautiful, and this story has a lot of personality and punch already, and I've only read the first few paragraphs. My favourite line(s) in particular are "In French, it was il etait une fois, and in German it was es war einmal, which literally meant "It was once." Sometimes it was translated as "Once there was" or "A long time ago" but most often, this trope was simply translated as "Once Upon a time." It's such a gorgeous sentence, and the personification of Once really interested me.

I love the way that you've written Snow White. She's got piles of personality, and I love that you have her seemingly having faults and perfections in her line of work. There's nothing I hate more in a story than a Mary Sue narrator, but you've done a really good job of keeping the innocence that Snow White seems to ooze, whilst having her lose control every so often (the last line of the chapter is a perfect example).

I think you've got an absolutely fabulous storyline here going, and you're a really amazing writer. Congratulations, you've got my recommendation and subscription, and I look forward to seeing how you interpret the fairytale next!

Comment Swap.
So far you have done an amazing job with your story. Usually when people try and take a fairy tale, or something well known, theyn end up screwing it up. But not you my dear. You've taken a fairy tale and put your own creative twist on it. And better yet you have so many people intrigued. I applaud your ability to create your own origniality on a new breedd of Snow White.

Firstly, I love your layout. I'm a sucker for a really good custom layout, aha. I love the opening line of the summary, it really drew me in. I love things about fairytales and stuff and the summary as a whole sounds really interesting. It sounds clever and I definitely want to read on.

The first chapter is really good. I love the main character, you've given her a real personality that makes her stand out from the start. I love this bit:

'Normally, trouble does not show up and politely announce itself as trouble. Rather, it prefers to disguise itself as something much more innocuous: A “Could you do me a favor?” or “I think this will interest you” or any other of a few thousand disguises. It’s very easy to say no to trouble, but it’s much harder to say no to a friend.

But sometimes trouble has the decency to sweep into your office (where you were definitely not sleeping) like an overdramatic storm cloud of black silk and lace that didn’t even have the decency to knock.'

It's probably my favourite part of the whole thing. It's clever, and drew me in so I wanted to keep reading. The only thing is that I think the last sentence could have an extra comma in there just so it slows it down a bit, but maybe that's just me. I couldn't find any errors when I was reading it so well done for that.

Overall, I really like this. It's clever and really original. Well done (:

Oh, my god. I am so hooked. This was the greatest first chapter I have ever read. You reinvention on the classic Snow White tale is utterly creative and unique. I have never come across anything like it. Coupled with your amazing descriptions and fun character voice, I can tell this is going to be a great story.

OH. One thing I really liked was how you explained things like being a Fairest, or the marriage laws between territories. It actually felt integrated, and not just a bit of background shoved into the chapter.

I am definitely subscribing and can't wait for more!

This is the first story that Comment Swap linked me to, and Holy Mother of God it pulled a good one for me! This is exactly the kind of story I would utterly devour were I to find it in a bookshop.

Your layout is beautiful, for starters, and that was the first thing that drew me in. It sets the tone for the story well, which is what all good layouts should do! I'm envious. Your summary is good too: informative without giving too much away, and giving just enough detail to hook the reader.

I'm a sucker for fairytale reinvention, and honestly this is already the most original take on the story of Snow White that I've had the pleasure of reading. Your narrative style is superb -- it actually reminds me a little of Neil Gaiman's style, and that coming from me is probably the equivalent of an art fanatic telling somebody they paint like Monet.

You've honestly managed to write one of the most engaging first chapters I've ever read. I'm completely and utterly hooked, and it's all down to your unique and imaginative take on the character of Snow White and, of course, your beautifully flowing narrative style. Your character voice is wonderful, too! I can already tell I'm going to like her.

From Comment Swap~

Oh. My. God. I think that this is possibly the most beautiful story layout that I’ve ever seen. I’m not even kidding. I wish I could make gorgeous layouts like this. Wah. Besides the layout, however, is the beautiful summary. What a lovely substitution for the idea of Snow White; truthfully, I’ve seen so many Snow White stories that have just fallen flat. But I think that this is the most original Snow White idea that I’ve seen on Mibba to date. I can already tell that I’m going to devour this lovely story – and this is just judging from the layout and summary! – and I can’t wait to begin reading :3

Your writing is an art, no doubt. I can say with confidence that I’m already in love with this story, and I’ve only just begun reading. I like that you start this with the classic – yet slightly cliché, lol – once upon a time, but yet you also make it more modern by adding, Once upon a time, there was a girl named Snow White, and she had the most unfortunate habit of attracting trouble. Which, I must say, makes this story that much more awesome!

Your descriptions are absolutely marvelous – I especially love the description of the Queen. Snort! I really like this plan that the Queen has set up for Snow. Somehow, it seems like everything and anything will go wrong, just so the Queen will have a reason to send Snow to the dungeon, but somehow, I doubt that any of that will happen. And I also really like that Snow White is kind of mischievous here, not like in the fairy tale, where all she is, is the epitome of innocence and beauty and such. Which is nice, but I really like your modern version a little more (:

So far, I greatly enjoyed this. I’m definitely subbing and reccing this, and will also patiently (or not so!) await the next update. Awesome job so far! <3

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Wow, I actually liked this! I like the start, like others have said I love it when people do their own versions of stories of this sort. Keep it going! <3 :)

I like the layout, the way it's written, and the way you're sort of managing the story. Just one thing, I get the feeling that it's probably my ipad but, I couldn't read some parts because of the font color? Again, I think it's probably mine, but, well :)

(Sorry for posting this a few times but it kept erasing half of what I wrote -.-)

Comment Swap:
Wow, I actually liked this! I like the start, like others have said I love it when people do their own versions of stories of this sort. Keep it going! <3 :)