Fear Itself - Comments

Tali and Avery are just adorable. I still do not like Alex though and I feel like he and Tali will end up together but I don't want them to be D: But omg I love this story so much. Pleaseee update soon :D

Most welcome, relationships that are fun to write always make the story better ^_^

@ SadNight
the "thavery" relationship, as I like to call it, might be one of my favorite parts of the whole story, so thank you!

I love Tali and Aery's relationship! It's so interesting to watch how they interact and how much they do care for each other; I hope the friendship remains and no one gets hurt. Keep up they great story. I'm wicked curious how the first chapter comes to be

@ khuckles
sent you a message! excited to chat about all this!

I've only begun to read this story since last night and am now up to the chapter on The Brotherhood. While I think it's a fantastic piece of writing so far, I'd really love to discuss your inspiration behind it. Do you think that this is a possible future? Or were you captivated by literature such as 1984 and V for Vendetta? Between the setting being in London, the white masks, and the similar wording to Anonymous, I'd be surprised if it wasn't. Personal message me if you read this and feel up to discussing. My name is Kara. Now to keep reading, keep it up!

@ revivall
Tali's very sheltered. It should probably be emphasized that most of the books her father is buying her are horribly, horribly outdated, as the point of the books are to keep her sheltered and occupied. But this is part of the reason I'm putting this online, to hear things like that so know what to fix, so thank you!

I love this story. The only thing that irks me sometimes is how naive Tali can be. She has read so many books that she must know about how harsh and horrible people can be and yet she still is this naive. The fact that she has read psychology books, too, makes it worse. I still love her loads, as I love this whole story and your writing style, but I just don't get how she can be that naive.

@ Smiling Scarlet
Very much right! Hahahaha I can't deny the anonymous creep factor. It's perfect for the Brotherhood.

The speech that was given by The Brotherhood sounded awfully familiar, haha! The group anonymous? Am I right? I'm still reading so expect more comments ;)

I was sent here via comment swap.

Wow, I really love the idea of this story! Your first chapter is interesting and exciting, just the right way to hook the reader in. I like the fact that you introduce each character, but don't give away too much. Your description is simply beautiful, and I couldn't see any grammar or spelling errors.

I really like that the story isn't in chronological order. It adds something to the storyline when you are left guessing after the first chapter, for it to go right back to when Tali was four in the third chapter.

I really love your plotline, your characters and the way you write. I don't have time to read this all at the moment, but I'll certainly be coming back to it when I do have time.

Aww Mumbles is so nice!

@ drowning the irony
Thank you! <3

I love this!!!! <3

Oh my goodness, I loved the Brotherhood chapter! And I must say I feel bad for the main character, fighting with one's inner self is so hard especially when it's over disappointing someone you love X/

Wow her dreams just gave me a bit of goosebumbs haha. Great update!

I love this story u just can't stop reading it!!! it's so unique and has me so curious as to where it's going to go<3 update update update!! :D

Lovely update, doll-face. :D

Keep up the amazing updates. :)

@ Smiling Scarlet
Thank you so much! I'm really trying to build their relationship up because it's just so important later and anfehf8iehfighe yes i could use a layout!

Okay, so I freaking love this story, it completely has me captivated, and I really hope you update soon. Do you need a layout? I can gladly provide this =]

But yeah, I love this story. I love the details, love the relationship with her father, and I just love how interested I am to this. haha.