When Night Breaks - Comments

Wow ! This is just exceptional and it flows really well! I've already read 5 or so chapters and I'm really intrigued :D I love how there is already a bond forming between Jay and Samantha and how strong his feelings are starting to get towards her... I love this xxxxxx

@ discoveringclouds
Haha! Love your comment!

Get married! There's too much kissing!

No one understands <\3 except the people
In the relationship.

@ BrittanyMorgan
Thank you! And I appreciate you reading! :)

Happy new year to you too! I love where this story is going, by the way. :D

I found this. I can't believe it! I thought to find a nice sweet story admist the weird stories up here on mibba and then I happen upon this. A Story with a heart.

I read it all at once. It's so lovely in different ways but has the relalities of life. The undertone of forgiveness and helping each other and being true to your morals is there. I love it.

Great job. Keep writing. You give me hope that there are more great stories out there. :')

Ha-ha. I love how Samantha gets him to come to dinner! I'm curious to know how it's all going to go down! I'm going to read the next chapter next. :) Good job!

@ etoile.
Thank you so much! ^.^

JAY DON'T MESS THIS UP.
ITS TURKEY DAY SON
TAKE IT EASY
but omg talk about plot development??!?!??!?! Kara & Katrina??? YOOOO that was crazy omg AND IAN IS DEAD???
like I didn't like him but damn girl how could you just boom kill him
THE MCKENZIES
y'all crazy omg jay watch out and sammi too D:
but omg Leo is team jay & sammi WHOOOOOOO
this is perf

jay you need to get a hold on your girl okay
um she's getting hit on by some creepy weirdo idk like he's makin' me really upset ya feel
no jay no
NO YOU AND SAMMI ARE GOING TO BE HAPPY DAMN IT

ian get away from my baby
GET AWAY FROM SAMMI
damn it jay where are you when i need you
u kno wut lacey ur a bad bff
breaking up my otp
HOW DARE YOU
smh

ian get away from my baby
GET AWAY FROM SAMMI
damn it jay where are you when i need you
u kno wut lacey ur a bad bff
breaking up my otp
HOW DARE YOU
smh

okay so like
this is a tiny error
but i'm like really nutty about dialogue grammar like it's really bad omg
um
like here in chapter six
um
"Knock knock" I heard Lacey say...
there should be a comma after knock and before that end quotation mark because it's something that Lacey is saying, even if it's a sound
"I mean, I don't wanna look like a slob"
and that should have a period after slob (though sammi bb u kno u sexy ok i don't kno wut u on about u got like aliens in luv wit u and all that so shush girl) because um it's the end of the quotation and the end of the sentence
some simple editing and taking a few minutes to look at the chapter before it's actually posted can do a world of good! but everyone makes mistakes so it's good son
it's all good
this is a super awesome amazing article on dialogue and how to write it properly (i'm telling ya 'cause i care okay babe)

jay & sammi for ever
ya her name is sammi with an i
deal with it
and ya
i'm shippin' them
HARD
c'est la vie son

SO. I'M HERE. READING. FINALLY. (praise the lord that i finally have some free time yay
aliens & humans
you've pleased me greatly
(i'm only on like chapter 4 but girl this story is a keeper whoo~)

@ Skarsgard of Sweden
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!

I love the update. It's amazing.

@ BrittanyMorgan
Awe thanks! :)

@ Artist Vs. Poet

Love your name by the way :D

@ Artist Vs. Poet

How could I not read? Always up for a good story!!