I like, like, like this! Finally...he told the young lady what his name was! Ha-ha. I was starting to wonder when she would find out his name! I like how you described how he felt, when she said his name. That was a nice touch! Also, it painted a picture in my mind, when she said "Jay." She repeated and nodded, "Thank you." I got this picture in my mind of a young girl, nodding and saying thank you! Ha-ha. When I read some stories, they paint a picture in my mind at some part's of the story. Very nice job on this chapter, once again. Can't wait to read more of it! :)
December 29th, 2012 at 06:40pm